Feedback On Draft Cut

I have been given feedback from everyone in my class on my draft cut for the opening sequence to my film. This is what they said (:

The actor was convincing, cutting to black constantly for the titles, distracting a bit for the story building edge of things.

Titles are too long, more shots of the small girl needed. Use a variety of shots.

Simple titles are good. Think it could be better if all the titles wern't the same, maybe move them round in a different way.

Needs a little extra work. Good use of font and elongation.

Sharpness of the clips. maybe needs improving. Contrast on the street needs brightening up slightly. Other than that very good.

Dark in places, needs lightening up. Costumes generally look like an average teenager.

Close up shots are effective and music works well with the sequence.

Although some shots are repeated, think they work great. Good transitions between shots and timing was good. Kept me interested.

Music goes very well with the camera shots, very professional.

Way to long titles, with boring effects. Although they are not over the top, could do with more though.